UTWP Project: Commend The Holy Principality of Saint Mark in UTWP World Assembly Posted February 29, 2020 Most of what I think has been said by LD already. Some minor things: - Influence has a capital letter, I think you might want to change that. - You might wish to specify what he accomplished during his time as Minister of foreign affairs and what is role as Guardian meant. - Like LD noted, more specified information is needed on his involvement in Albion, Osiris and TSR. Really good first draft, though! Teralyon and Saint Mark 2
UTWP Project: Commend The Holy Principality of Saint Mark
in UTWP World Assembly
Posted
Most of what I think has been said by LD already. Some minor things:
- Influence has a capital letter, I think you might want to change that.
- You might wish to specify what he accomplished during his time as Minister of foreign affairs and what is role as Guardian meant.
- Like LD noted, more specified information is needed on his involvement in Albion, Osiris and TSR.
Really good first draft, though!